Comments on: What is your opinion of the short (WIP) (DAQ) poem?

By: Precious to Jesus

Precious to Jesus — Sun, 28 Jun 2009 11:59:59 +0000

Impressive! That must have taken some thought and effort. I hope it was good mental exercise for you. Had you not included that link it wouldn't have crossed my mind that you used "literature." Good job! Keep up the good work! )
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By: Kate Alex Bahleef

Kate Alex Bahleef — Sun, 28 Jun 2009 11:30:59 +0000

This is an acrostic poem using LITERATURE. You did it very well and kept to the nature theme as well as using some interesting word pictures and imaginative ideas. The words said more than the value of the words said separately. Definite thumbs up.
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By: gigi

gigi — Sun, 28 Jun 2009 11:17:59 +0000

Whew — I'm glad WIP and DAQ were explained, especially after your scifaiku. I loved that. I'll read it again.

A typo: forest has just one r.
Good word — taxus. Julius would like that one.

It is really a good poem, but I'm still jazzed by your scientific haiku, so it's hard to settle and enjoy the peaceful scene. Sorry, it just didn't grab me. gg
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By: westley_foster

westley_foster — Sun, 28 Jun 2009 11:08:59 +0000

I realy like how your verse flowed together and was so structuraly sound you have grown much in skill. I just wish your ending was a little better after such a deep and beautifull poem. I'd make the last two lines a little further along explaining why nature spared and protected you and leaves so many behind.
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by the way hi again and thanx for your concern before I try to awnser at least one question a week now so if you want to check on me scope my profile and check out what question I gave the time to awnser in my awnsered questions… I feel like a question should be thought over thouroly and an awnser given time for it to be the best and with my very limeted net use one is alot. much love for your poetry though I'll always try to read them.

By: Janez

Janez — Sun, 28 Jun 2009 10:31:59 +0000

I really like your poem. You are a great inspiration. Thanks for sharing.
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By: Semper Fi Rebirth

Semper Fi Rebirth — Sun, 28 Jun 2009 10:06:59 +0000

Beautiful Tori.
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By: jimi

jimi — Sun, 28 Jun 2009 09:19:59 +0000

I got to love it!
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By: mtheoryrules

mtheoryrules — Sun, 28 Jun 2009 09:04:59 +0000

I would play on the literature part more I feel like the word spelled
and the theme are- not resolved somehow
but that is just me
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By: Lillsoma

Lillsoma — Sun, 28 Jun 2009 08:54:59 +0000

~_~.

Hi Tori -

Please Forgive my Ignorance, (PFI)…But, May I have the Actual Question (AQ), or is this Yet To Come YTC) ?

{{**I'm quite intrigued**}}<—– This is my actual answer…..

As I said to you before, Poetry Both Lulls me and Confuses me. Sometimes, however, I get it and it will hit a nerve!

I WAS having fun in the first sentence so, please don't take it as an insult..I figure, you are my Grasshopper to poetry.
(PIT) Poet In Training. Maybe, just "Ability to Comprehend Poetry in Training" (ACPT) Thank You for Sharing, Looking forward to more!

Take Care!! Lillsoma

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By: Intrusivosity With Medium Doubt

Intrusivosity With Medium Doubt — Sun, 28 Jun 2009 08:25:59 +0000

It's GTG and I see no RFI.
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GTG – good to go
RFI – room for improvement

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